Organizational Methods: TRANSITIONS
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EXTENDED EXAMPLE
ANALYSIS:
Now, focus on
the introductory paragraph, and the transitional sentence which
begins PARAGRAPH
2:
- This is my 14th year of formal
education, and by now I calculate that I have sat before at
least 70 different teachers. They have come in all sizes,
shapes, ages and weights. Some were doddering senior citizens,
while others were young and still wet behind the ears. Some were
tall enough to play pro basketball; others barely peered over
their desks. Some were talkative and flamboyant; others were
surly and secretive. But despite these and many other
differences in age, personality and appearance, when it comes to
job performance, three basic types of teachers emerge --lazy,
tyrannical, and concerned.
- While individual students may
react differently to these three types, I personally have the
least regard for lazy teachers.
Note that the transitional
sentence briefly refers back to the main idea (i.e. three types). It
also anticipates the subject of paragraph 2 (i.e. the lazy teacher).
Note, too, that the transitional sentence suggests that the three
teachers are going to be considered in a logical, and not a random
order. The paper begins by discussing the type of teacher for whom
the student has the least regard and will presumably ascend, in
logical sequence, to the type teacher the writer likes best. That
logical scheme is also helpful in making this paper coherent.
Next, examine
Paragraph 2, and the transitional sentence which begins PARAGRAPH
3:
- While individual students may react
differently to these three types, I personally have the least
regard for lazy teachers. Since such instructors do not want to
do any work themselves, they demand very little work from their
students. Assignments are few, tests are strictly of the
True-False variety for easy grading, and papers are returned
without any helpful commentary .A grade is all the student is
ever likely to see, without any indication of why something was
marked wrong. Since lazy teachers don't provide any challenges,
they create lazy students. Lazy students don't learn very much.
- Although the atmosphere is less
pleasant than in the country club run by his lazy counterpart,
the tyrannical teacher's classroom is a better place to learn.
This sentence also refers
back to the lazy teacher as the subject of Paragraph 2, and
introduces the tyrannical teacher as the topic of Paragraph 3. The
sentence also implies the continuation of the worst-best order by
suggesting that the tyrant's classroom is a "somewhat" better place
in which to learn. Note, too, the use of the transitional word
"although" to express a contrast between the two types of classroom
experience.
Now look at
Paragraph 3, and the transitional sentence beginning PARAGRAPH 4:
- Although the atmosphere is less
pleasant than in the country club run by his lazy counterpart,
the tyrannical teacher's classroom is a better place to learn.
The tyrant, at least, demands performance from his or her
students, and they are bound to benefit somewhat just from being
forced to work. However, the classroom tyrant also frustrates
young learners by insisting that they perform every task in only
one way, with no experimentation allowed. Such a teacher is not
open to inquiry and does not tolerate any honest disagreement
with pronouncements from behind the imperial podium. For
example, the tyrannical literature teacher insists on one, and
only one interpretation of even a complex poem like "La Belle
Dame sans Merci." God help the student who tries to disagree! By
insisting on a slavish recitation of their own narrow views,
tyrannical teachers discourage students' desire to find things
out for themselves.
- Head and shoulders above either
the lazy teacher or his tyrannical cousin stands the concerned
teacher.
This transition refers back
to both the lazy and tyrannical teacher, introduces the concerned
teacher, and completes the logical ordering of those types by saying
the latter is best of the three. Thus, the transitions in this paper
are effective. The reader can follow the writer's scheme and can
understand not only the three types of teacher, but also what this
writer thinks about each.
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